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TREVER · 03-20-2008, 01:38 AM

lookin for some feedback.. lemme know what's go0d.

T.R.E.V

TREVER · 03-20-2008, 12:48 PM

upped...........

OFFiCiAL JAE ROCK · 03-20-2008, 01:21 PM

shit was good

lyrics were cool...flow was good

hook was aite....

good shit thou cuz...stay up, check my shit out if u can

c eazy

Fre3dom · 03-20-2008, 03:05 PM

TREV this is Thugsy......this was cool.....hook was not that good but the flow and lyrics were nice....good multies...nice drop

go check mine...either the one called "London" or "Free" and can u leave feed in my new freestyle....good looks....good to have u back

abcdefghijklmnop · 03-20-2008, 03:25 PM

The flow was a little on an off, work on keepin it perfect the whole time an the song steps up a level.

Finally some good vocal quality on this site.

Tom Chambers · 03-20-2008, 03:56 PM

yo this is lotus (prolly don't remember from gworld days)

pretty dope shit.......nice lyrics................flow was pretty good.......you record in a studio?

TREVER · 03-20-2008, 07:49 PM

yea, shit's done in a studio.. and I get you with the flow.. but this is kind of what I was lookin for.. goin on & off makes it feel a lil more live to me.. as opposed to all the bullshit rap we got nowadays.. wanted the lyrics to make you think about what I was sayin.. as opposed to poppin bottles and all that mindless shit.. but much propz on the feed back man.. appreciate it to the fullest.

abcdefghijklmnop · 03-20-2008, 08:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by TREVER

yea, shit's done in a studio.. and I get you with the flow.. but this is kind of what I was lookin for.. goin on & off makes it feel a lil more live to me.. as opposed to all the bullshit rap we got nowadays.. wanted the lyrics to make you think about what I was sayin.. as opposed to poppin bottles and all that mindless shit.. but much propz on the feed back man.. appreciate it to the fullest.

Yeah its cool, I was just looking at it from a producers point of view ya know, like there would have been sections that would have got redid before it left the studio.

But yeah I havent listened to the radio in about 2 years (other than the classic rock station) .. not into bottle poppin rap either

Fabuless · 03-20-2008, 11:16 PM

good track, quality was on, flow was on and off, lyrics were straight

and im with u and dusty on this one, bottle poppin music is mind numbing bull shit, same

with hyphy shit,

my number one rapper right now isss lupe fiasco

his latest album was fire

abcdefghijklmnop · 03-21-2008, 01:13 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Fabuless

good track, quality was on, flow was on and off, lyrics were straight

and im with u and dusty on this one, bottle poppin music is mind numbing bull shit, same

with hyphy shit,

my number one rapper right now isss lupe fiasco

his latest album was fire

mos def hes def my fav new artist in the game.

an yeah The Cool > Food & Liquor

TREVER · 03-21-2008, 03:54 PM

Agree.. LUPE is my shit.. him & Joe Budden all day.. everything else.. fuck it.. haha.. much propz on the feed folks.. for real.. an yea "abcdefghijklmnop" .. I was in & out of that studio.. lol.. I wan't lookin for like a finish product. .dude heard of me and offered to do a quick track.. so I took the chance.. came it alright I would think.. but not pro just yet.

Anymore feed would be fuckin niiice... get at me folks!

LiLMiSs50 · 03-21-2008, 04:29 PM

yeaaa lol

the lyrics are tite love that it isnt about the same basic shit money. cars. clothes. hoes.

much props for that, the hook was tite, the flow was tite to me, yea it mighta been a lil off and on but thats wat made it tite to me? idk i enjoyed that

and u got a nice voice for rappin, idk wat it is but its tite, and at that at the ending when the beat stopped and u like prayed that was sickkkkk liked that

overall sick audio lyrics were dope tho cant emphasize on that enuff . def going on my ipod lol .. get at it make a mixtape thats wat u shud really go do

best the sites been blessed with since la kid

LA-Kid · 03-21-2008, 11:30 PM

Your Flow is a Lil Shaky, As in it Sounds Like You are Forcing Multis, Audio is Not Text, You Have Patential Though, But You Sound Like every Other White Rapper Voice Wise, Quality is Clean.

TREVER · 03-22-2008, 04:24 AM

haha. yea, I got u.. lol.. but.. I'm white.. and I dunno how else to sound.. cause if I were to change it up.. would I sound purple?? ..hah.. I don't wanna categorize shit by pigment.. but I got u man.. doin what I do..& that's about it..as fot eht multis and all taht shit.. I an't tryin to sound like these other "rappers" nowadays.. I'm tryin to sound like me.. & that it. really. ANd i ain't perfected my sound yet..that's why ask for opinions.. as long as y'all recognize that I don't wanna sound like "rap format" that that rappers go for nowadays.. ain't bout what sells to me.. it's about what's right to me.. hope somebody feels me on that one. THank yas.. peace!!

any otehr feed would nice.. get at me.. thankx..
T.R.E.V

<^>..OhboyJ..<^>' · 03-22-2008, 06:57 AM

On some real shit This was cool
The Only Problem I got
Is that your flow was shaky sometimes
Other times it was gd.
You got the talent fam keep using It

TREVER · 03-22-2008, 03:51 PM

Yea man, I feel you on that one for sure. LIek I said, this was done in a few hrs and shit.. mroe of a demo thing cause I never had a chance to be in a studio.. so it was right quick. Tryin to master my craft.. and this is the 1st step.
Thankx again my dude!!!!

YoungJ · 03-23-2008, 01:42 AM

Yeah.. you a dope lyricist, no doubt. I respect you. Anybody who fucks with Budden and Lupe all day is bound to end up with talent lol. I wasn't feelin this hook though. Other then that, everything was straight.

TREVER · 03-23-2008, 04:33 AM

hahaa.. thankx my dude. . .. I appreciate that shit... and it kinda wasn't a hook..realy I guess... just somethin that would stand out in the track.. but I get u 4sure.. I just wasn't lookin to create something that was standard "song fomat".. but I do see what you sayin.. much propz...

Lemme know what's go0d!

LiLMiSs50 · 03-23-2008, 05:33 AM

it was catchy

y u hOes frOntin .. lOl 8)

KeepIt1Hunnid · 03-23-2008, 11:00 AM

Yo this was pretty hot Trev, I think you over did the multi's a little in verse two, but still hot...Im feelin the hook...

TREVER · 03-23-2008, 12:03 PM

hahah.. thankx man. .appreciate the feedback..glad somebody felt the hook a lil.. haha and just as a lil note about the "multis" and things.. I didn't write this verse in any type of format where I'd place multis and shit like that.. I just wrote it as it came to mind and what I felt needed to come next.. but I get what you sayin either way. Was just lettin loose.. like I said... I ain't perfected shit yet.. haha.. this is just mixtape-throwaway shit.. if I felt it was gonna go on an album.. it wouldn't be on here for free..haha.. feel me??

HO0k a dude up with so0o0ome feeeeddd!!! thankx ..haha

TREVER · 03-24-2008, 01:50 PM

uppin one tiiiiiimmeee!!!

HJones · 03-24-2008, 08:08 PM

shit was dope... i was feelin ur style.. flow wasnt as bad as ppl were sayin.. but wasnt great either
stay up

TREVER · 03-25-2008, 11:50 PM

Much propz man..haha.. I feel you..glad you liked it..haa.
but I guess people are expectin some Dr. Dre/Kanye type production here.. lol.. this shit was right quick.. so don't get to technical on me.. hurtin a muthafuckas feelingd..haha.. jk jk... fuckit .. lemme have it.. haha.. any more feed??

TREVER · 03-26-2008, 10:09 AM

all these views and no feed.. dudes is eatin and not sayin grace..hhaha.. c'man.. just lookin for a lil mo feed.

03-20-2008, 01:38 AM	#1
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	03/19/08 - <<<~~~ My Rise, My Fall ~~~>>> 03/19/08 - <<<~~~ My Rise, My Fall ~~~>>> lookin for some feedback.. lemme know what's go0d. T.R.E.V

03-20-2008, 01:21 PM	#3
OFFiCiAL JAE ROCK G.E.D...... Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: North C@rolin@ Posts: 5,582 Repped: 644 Repped 835 Times in 415 Posts Neg Reps: 108 Neg Repped at 125 Times in 89 Posts	shit was good lyrics were cool...flow was good hook was aite.... good shit thou cuz...stay up, check my shit out if u can c eazy __________________ {-LONG TIME COMIN'-}..COMIN SOON..

03-20-2008, 03:25 PM	#5
abcdefghijklmnop Dusty B, Producer Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Tampa, FL Posts: 487 Repped: 26 Repped 80 Times in 35 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	The flow was a little on an off, work on keepin it perfect the whole time an the song steps up a level. Finally some good vocal quality on this site. __________________

03-20-2008, 11:16 PM	#9
Fabuless Producer Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Toronto Posts: 5,285 Repped: 2,380 Repped 204 Times in 59 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	good track, quality was on, flow was on and off, lyrics were straight and im with u and dusty on this one, bottle poppin music is mind numbing bull shit, same with hyphy shit, my number one rapper right now isss lupe fiasco his latest album was fire __________________ 20 G's for this watch, Are you sick G? A dot com on my arm, ThisIs50 - Chamillionaire

03-21-2008, 04:29 PM	#12
LiLMiSs50 avy= my ribcage nOt neck Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: WEST COAST Posts: 5,832 Repped: 51 Repped 66 Times in 33 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	yeaaa lol the lyrics are tite love that it isnt about the same basic shit money. cars. clothes. hoes. much props for that, the hook was tite, the flow was tite to me, yea it mighta been a lil off and on but thats wat made it tite to me? idk i enjoyed that and u got a nice voice for rappin, idk wat it is but its tite, and at that at the ending when the beat stopped and u like prayed that was sickkkkk liked that overall sick audio lyrics were dope tho cant emphasize on that enuff . def going on my ipod lol .. get at it make a mixtape thats wat u shud really go do best the sites been blessed with since la kid __________________ .. liLMiSsFiF BiTTERSWEET ...

03-20-2008, 12:48 PM	#2
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	upped...........

03-20-2008, 03:05 PM	#4
Fre3dom Join Date: Mar 2008 Location: London Posts: 924 Repped: 65 Repped 117 Times in 61 Posts Neg Reps: 63 Neg Repped at 17 Times in 15 Posts	TREV this is Thugsy......this was cool.....hook was not that good but the flow and lyrics were nice....good multies...nice drop go check mine...either the one called "London" or "Free" and can u leave feed in my new freestyle....good looks....good to have u back

03-20-2008, 03:56 PM	#6
Tom Chambers AkA Sur-Vis-U-All Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: pittsburgh Posts: 11,280 Repped: 132 Repped 477 Times in 296 Posts Neg Reps: 19 Neg Repped at 68 Times in 54 Posts	yo this is lotus (prolly don't remember from gworld days) pretty dope shit.......nice lyrics................flow was pretty good.......you record in a studio?

03-20-2008, 07:49 PM	#7
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	yea, shit's done in a studio.. and I get you with the flow.. but this is kind of what I was lookin for.. goin on & off makes it feel a lil more live to me.. as opposed to all the bullshit rap we got nowadays.. wanted the lyrics to make you think about what I was sayin.. as opposed to poppin bottles and all that mindless shit.. but much propz on the feed back man.. appreciate it to the fullest.

03-21-2008, 03:54 PM	#11
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	Agree.. LUPE is my shit.. him & Joe Budden all day.. everything else.. fuck it.. haha.. much propz on the feed folks.. for real.. an yea "abcdefghijklmnop" .. I was in & out of that studio.. lol.. I wan't lookin for like a finish product. .dude heard of me and offered to do a quick track.. so I took the chance.. came it alright I would think.. but not pro just yet. Anymore feed would be fuckin niiice... get at me folks!

03-21-2008, 11:30 PM	#13
LA-Kid POYNT BLANK Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: LA Posts: 5,387 Repped: 9 Repped 12 Times in 5 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Your Flow is a Lil Shaky, As in it Sounds Like You are Forcing Multis, Audio is Not Text, You Have Patential Though, But You Sound Like every Other White Rapper Voice Wise, Quality is Clean.

03-22-2008, 04:24 AM	#14
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	haha. yea, I got u.. lol.. but.. I'm white.. and I dunno how else to sound.. cause if I were to change it up.. would I sound purple?? ..hah.. I don't wanna categorize shit by pigment.. but I got u man.. doin what I do..& that's about it..as fot eht multis and all taht shit.. I an't tryin to sound like these other "rappers" nowadays.. I'm tryin to sound like me.. & that it. really. ANd i ain't perfected my sound yet..that's why ask for opinions.. as long as y'all recognize that I don't wanna sound like "rap format" that that rappers go for nowadays.. ain't bout what sells to me.. it's about what's right to me.. hope somebody feels me on that one. THank yas.. peace!! any otehr feed would nice.. get at me.. thankx.. T.R.E.V

03-22-2008, 06:57 AM	#15
<^>..OhboyJ..<^>' The Element Of Surprise Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Trinidad Posts: 9,312 Repped: 131 Repped 157 Times in 45 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	On some real shit This was cool The Only Problem I got Is that your flow was shaky sometimes Other times it was gd. You got the talent fam keep using It __________________

03-22-2008, 03:51 PM	#16
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	Yea man, I feel you on that one for sure. LIek I said, this was done in a few hrs and shit.. mroe of a demo thing cause I never had a chance to be in a studio.. so it was right quick. Tryin to master my craft.. and this is the 1st step. Thankx again my dude!!!!

03-23-2008, 01:42 AM	#17
YoungJ Young J Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Providence RI Posts: 3,003 Repped: 203 Repped 385 Times in 113 Posts Neg Reps: 5 Neg Repped at 4 Times in 4 Posts	Yeah.. you a dope lyricist, no doubt. I respect you. Anybody who fucks with Budden and Lupe all day is bound to end up with talent lol. I wasn't feelin this hook though. Other then that, everything was straight.

03-23-2008, 04:33 AM	#18
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	hahaa.. thankx my dude. . .. I appreciate that shit... and it kinda wasn't a hook..realy I guess... just somethin that would stand out in the track.. but I get u 4sure.. I just wasn't lookin to create something that was standard "song fomat".. but I do see what you sayin.. much propz... Lemme know what's go0d!

03-23-2008, 05:33 AM	#19
LiLMiSs50 avy= my ribcage nOt neck Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: WEST COAST Posts: 5,832 Repped: 51 Repped 66 Times in 33 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 1 Time in 1 Post	it was catchy y u hOes frOntin .. lOl 8) __________________ .. liLMiSsFiF BiTTERSWEET ...

03-23-2008, 11:00 AM	#20
KeepIt1Hunnid Veteran Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: TaMpA BaY Posts: 3,120 Repped: 49 Repped 57 Times in 24 Posts Neg Reps: 2 Neg Repped at 0 Times in 0 Posts	Yo this was pretty hot Trev, I think you over did the multi's a little in verse two, but still hot...Im feelin the hook...

03-23-2008, 12:03 PM	#21
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	hahah.. thankx man. .appreciate the feedback..glad somebody felt the hook a lil.. haha and just as a lil note about the "multis" and things.. I didn't write this verse in any type of format where I'd place multis and shit like that.. I just wrote it as it came to mind and what I felt needed to come next.. but I get what you sayin either way. Was just lettin loose.. like I said... I ain't perfected shit yet.. haha.. this is just mixtape-throwaway shit.. if I felt it was gonna go on an album.. it wouldn't be on here for free..haha.. feel me?? HO0k a dude up with so0o0ome feeeeddd!!! thankx ..haha

03-24-2008, 01:50 PM	#22
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	uppin one tiiiiiimmeee!!!

03-24-2008, 08:08 PM	#23
HJones Veteran Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: Mars Posts: 3,091 Repped: 1,087 Repped 891 Times in 393 Posts Neg Reps: 443 Neg Repped at 360 Times in 286 Posts	shit was dope... i was feelin ur style.. flow wasnt as bad as ppl were sayin.. but wasnt great either stay up

03-25-2008, 11:50 PM	#24
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	Much propz man..haha.. I feel you..glad you liked it..haa. but I guess people are expectin some Dr. Dre/Kanye type production here.. lol.. this shit was right quick.. so don't get to technical on me.. hurtin a muthafuckas feelingd..haha.. jk jk... fuckit .. lemme have it.. haha.. any more feed??

03-26-2008, 10:09 AM	#25
TREVER WHITEBOY Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: THE VERM... Posts: 251 Repped: 0 Repped 14 Times in 8 Posts Neg Reps: 0 Neg Repped at 5 Times in 3 Posts	all these views and no feed.. dudes is eatin and not sayin grace..hhaha.. c'man.. just lookin for a lil mo feed.

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